 |
| Giorgio de Chirico, Mystery and Melancholy of a Street |
She cuts open the belly
of night
finding a yellow ribbon
of dreams
kissing the sky high
weary walls white
like a bride
though neither sun nor moon
joins in her game
she invites time and his shadow
standing in the corner
of ancient and anew
her hair dances
her steps flew
so why hide
brimming tears of gold
songs of blue
rolling into laughter
magical carpet unfold
until tremble subsides
time passes through
* This poem is part of the dVersePoet's art challenge prompt. Photo credits as listed in the caption.
Beautiful. I admire your ability of telling so much with so few words.
ReplyDeletenice...love the intense imagery you open with cutting open the belly, i saw it kinda like a fish being fileted...a yellow ribbon of dreams...this is well penned with fine imagery...
ReplyDeletesee you for open link night here in a bit...
You've captured his sense of anticipation and intensity. His angles and perspective exaggerated which ties so well into your lines about kissing the sky and the white wall like a bride. The starting and stopping of time add to the disorientation. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI like the surrealistic accents, the contrasts, and really like how you wedded the apprehensiveness in the picture with tones of hope and light.
ReplyDeleteThe first stanza really caught my attention. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThis is a breath-taking interpretation of the Poetics prompt...perhaps one of the best I've visited. Right from the first line, you hooked me. So glad to discover your work.
ReplyDeleteVery nice! I like the idea of an art-driven prompt.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite line:
"She cuts open the belly
of night"
wow, the first line is an attention grabber. a wonderful interpretation of the entire painting. bravo!
ReplyDeleteAn intense word play off the image, very nicely done!
ReplyDelete..you started with a strong line that knocks instantly at my door – that’s nice.. i like, as well, how you deal with this piece with some playfulness… great one!
ReplyDeletelove the opening lines...strong and tight..and then you get quite playful with the yellow ribbon...really nicely penned
ReplyDeleteThe first stanza is particularly well written, A striking and unusual image!
ReplyDeleteGreat photo and poem! :-)
ReplyDeleteHave a nice week :-)
~Ron
I enjoyed reading your artistic interpretation of this painting. You gave it an entirely new life!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem!
ReplyDeleteI am so glad to be back here on your blog this morning. :)
The last stanza formed some really cool pictures in my head. Tears, sound and laughter turning into a magic carpet. I like that.
ReplyDeleteThe imagery of this poem is amazing! I love the first stanza most.
ReplyDeleteLove the imagery ...nice write.
ReplyDeleteThis comment has been removed by the author.
ReplyDeleteI'm not much of a poet, but I admire those who are good at it.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful work.